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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

I am a slut, a whore and everything thats lewd

But you know I am your lady

I am dirty and crude and everything thats rude

But you know I am your lady

I can fuck you like a banshee but make love like a Queen

But always...you know I am your lady

I can fuck you like a porn star and treat you like my King

But I am still...your lady

I can make your dreams come true and make your cock SING!

But you know I am a lady

I can make you proud and happy and love you everyday.

I can give you all your heart desires now and everyday.

I can do this for noone but the very few.

In truth, I know I can do this all but only do it for you...

Because. ..you know I am YOUR lady

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

Lol....sorry...just had a moment! X

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Clinton Cards are really aiming for new markets

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By *ezebelWoman over a year ago

North of The Wall - youll need your vest

"Clinton Cards are really aiming for new markets"

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

Ooh harsh! Boo hoo!

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

Going to remove it. Embarassed now!

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

Oh bugger! I cant! Lol! Oh well! Just have to go around red faced then!

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By *r Mahogany70Man over a year ago

Leicester

"I am a slut, a whore and everything thats lewd

But you know I am your lady

I am dirty and crude and everything thats rude

But you know I am your lady

I can fuck you like a banshee but make love like a Queen

But always...you know I am your lady

I can fuck you like a porn star and treat you like my King

But I am still...your lady

I can make your dreams come true and make your cock SING!

But you know I am a lady

I can make you proud and happy and love you everyday.

I can give you all your heart desires now and everyday.

I can do this for noone but the very few.

In truth, I know I can do this all but only do it for you...

Because. ..you know I am YOUR lady

"I can do this for noone but the very few" kinda negates the "YOUR lady", dontcha think?

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

Ok it was crap!

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I'm jealous of the man this is being written too and wish someone would write something like that for me. Don't be embarrassed.

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By *ighland_RoseCouple over a year ago

Brigadoon

Don't you remove it! It's really good.

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By *r Mahogany70Man over a year ago

Leicester

"I'm jealous of the man this is being written too and wish someone would write something like that for me. Don't be embarrassed."

I'm composing a sonnet for you right now, Andy

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

I know its crap...and I am embarrassed especially when people take the piss. I am just beginning to use writing as a form of expressing in a different way. But never mind. I dont claim to be Shakespeare!

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"I'm jealous of the man this is being written too and wish someone would write something like that for me. Don't be embarrassed.

I'm composing a sonnet for you right now, Andy

I will be sure not to CRITIQUE you, like you did me.... for having the courage to post it then...IF you do!

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I like it.... x

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"I like it.... x"

Thankyou for saying that x

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Don't you remove it! It's really good."

Thankyou too x

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

Look...I KNOW I am no poet...and some would argue why I am on a site like this. ...posting my 'poetry'...

It is simply another form of expressing feelings, thoughts, fantasy.... ideas.... which is what I believe the forums are about?

But I do not expect sarcasm.. especially from some who I would expect to know better! If you dont like it, then simply pass me by x

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"I'm jealous of the man this is being written too and wish someone would write something like that for me. Don't be embarrassed.

I'm composing a sonnet for you right now, Andy

I will be sure not to CRITIQUE you, like you did me.... for having the courage to post it then...IF you do!"

Forget what anyone says in criticism. Expressing yourself like this is great for the soul. I really liked it and would have loved to see it written in a valentines card or just given to me on the spur

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By *r Mahogany70Man over a year ago

Leicester

"I'm jealous of the man this is being written too and wish someone would write something like that for me. Don't be embarrassed.

I'm composing a sonnet for you right now, Andy

I will be sure not to CRITIQUE you, like you did me.... for having the courage to post it then...IF you do!"

Ha, like I'm really going to compose a sonnet for Andy.

I actually think what you did was not bad at all. I'm was merely pointing out the "your lady" sentiment doesn't really fit if you're saying you intend to share your charms with others, that's all.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"I'm jealous of the man this is being written too and wish someone would write something like that for me. Don't be embarrassed.

I'm composing a sonnet for you right now, Andy

I will be sure not to CRITIQUE you, like you did me.... for having the courage to post it then...IF you do!

Ha, like I'm really going to compose a sonnet for Andy.

I actually think what you did was not bad at all. I'm was merely pointing out the "your lady" sentiment doesn't really fit if you're saying you intend to share your charms with others, that's all. "

I didnt ask for a critique...but you didn't understand the meaning anyway. That doesnt matter. I dont expect you to. You have missed the point completely.....way off in fact. But that doesnt matter for it wasnt written with you in mind. People will interpret as they think. Your interpretation was very 'literal'....so it missed the meaning.

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By *iewMan over a year ago
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Angus & Findhorn

Continue to post them, they are your work... Be proud.

Not everyone will get them, but Jesus, spare the drama.

Just go with the flow and post your words

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"I'm jealous of the man this is being written too and wish someone would write something like that for me. Don't be embarrassed.

I'm composing a sonnet for you right now, Andy

I will be sure not to CRITIQUE you, like you did me.... for having the courage to post it then...IF you do!

Thankyou for your encouragement x

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Continue to post them, they are your work... Be proud.

Not everyone will get them, but Jesus, spare the drama.

Just go with the flow and post your words

Drama?

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I am really glad you chose to declare your feelings about me in such a lovely way but i thought you agreed we would keep this quiet.

The wifes gone all jealous now and she is giving it a go. Just got the first two lines done but she is struggling a bit.....

'I am your lady,

Even though you are a fucking useless twat'.

Couldn't do us a favour and polish it up a little for her...

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"I am really glad you chose to declare your feelings about me in such a lovely way but i thought you agreed we would keep this quiet.

The wifes gone all jealous now and she is giving it a go. Just got the first two lines done but she is struggling a bit.....

'I am your lady,

Even though you are a fucking useless twat'.

Couldn't do us a favour and polish it up a little for her...

I THINK you are joking and dont mean to take the piss.

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By *iamondsmiles.Woman over a year ago

little house on the praire

"Continue to post them, they are your work... Be proud.

Not everyone will get them, but Jesus, spare the drama.

Just go with the flow and post your words

Drama?"
you are rather defensive, post your poems but you have to expect a variety of replies. Some you will like some you won't

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

Oh Jesus!

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

If I may... These threads in forums are in the public domain. One cannot post something and demand there will only be positive replies/critiques. That would render any discussion useless.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Continue to post them, they are your work... Be proud.

Not everyone will get them, but Jesus, spare the drama.

Just go with the flow and post your words

Drama?you are rather defensive, post your poems but you have to expect a variety of replies. Some you will like some you won't

I am quite prepared that some wont like them...and not really expecting people to like them as I know I am not a poet...but not prepared for the sarcasm. That has taken me aback tbh. Thats all. People can be unkind and I wouldn't do that if someone took the courage to post it. If I really couldnt be nice I wouldn't say anything.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"If I may... These threads in forums are in the public domain. One cannot post something and demand there will only be positive replies/critiques. That would render any discussion useless. "

IF it were a discussion....I would agree with you. But it wasnt. It was just sarcasm.

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By *r Mahogany70Man over a year ago

Leicester

"I'm jealous of the man this is being written too and wish someone would write something like that for me. Don't be embarrassed.

I'm composing a sonnet for you right now, Andy

I will be sure not to CRITIQUE you, like you did me.... for having the courage to post it then...IF you do!

Ha, like I'm really going to compose a sonnet for Andy.

I actually think what you did was not bad at all. I'm was merely pointing out the "your lady" sentiment doesn't really fit if you're saying you intend to share your charms with others, that's all.

Calm down, calm down

Tell you what, next time you post anything on a public forum say something along the lines of "Please, do not respond unless you have nothing but praise for me. I only want those who agree with me to reply. This applies particularly to you Mr Mahogany70".

I shall then do my best to acquiesce

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"I am really glad you chose to declare your feelings about me in such a lovely way but i thought you agreed we would keep this quiet.

The wifes gone all jealous now and she is giving it a go. Just got the first two lines done but she is struggling a bit.....

'I am your lady,

Even though you are a fucking useless twat'.

Couldn't do us a favour and polish it up a little for her...

I THINK you are joking and dont mean to take the piss. "

Am taking the mickey but secretly would love someone to take the time to do this for me, the sentiment behind the poem is lovely x

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By *iamondsmiles.Woman over a year ago

little house on the praire

"Continue to post them, they are your work... Be proud.

Not everyone will get them, but Jesus, spare the drama.

Just go with the flow and post your words

Drama?you are rather defensive, post your poems but you have to expect a variety of replies. Some you will like some you won't

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By *am123Man over a year ago

essex chelmsford

"I am a slut, a whore and everything thats lewd

But you know I am your lady

I am dirty and crude and everything thats rude

But you know I am your lady

I can fuck you like a banshee but make love like a Queen

But always...you know I am your lady

I can fuck you like a porn star and treat you like my King

But I am still...your lady

I can make your dreams come true and make your cock SING!

But you know I am a lady

I can make you proud and happy and love you everyday.

I can give you all your heart desires now and everyday.

I can do this for noone but the very few.

In truth, I know I can do this all but only do it for you...

Because. ..you know I am YOUR lady

"
thats nice an all but i dont know you but thanks

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"I'm jealous of the man this is being written too and wish someone would write something like that for me. Don't be embarrassed.

I'm composing a sonnet for you right now, Andy

I will be sure not to CRITIQUE you, like you did me.... for having the courage to post it then...IF you do!

Ha, like I'm really going to compose a sonnet for Andy.

I actually think what you did was not bad at all. I'm was merely pointing out the "your lady" sentiment doesn't really fit if you're saying you intend to share your charms with others, that's all.

Calm down, calm down

I shall then do my best to acquiesce

That's all well and good but where's my sonnet? LOL

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"If I may... These threads in forums are in the public domain. One cannot post something and demand there will only be positive replies/critiques. That would render any discussion useless.

IF it were a discussion....I would agree with you. But it wasnt. It was just sarcasm."

No to my ears. I have posted personal thoughts which received some unpleasant reactions. You have to be prepared for that, or not post at all.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

I posted a poem before and recieved constructive and insightful comments that led to an interesting discussion, even if people didnt agree with the message as such... which was all fine! Unfortunately for some reason....it hasnt happened that way on here. So it has made me apprehensive about posting more in the future. So I apologise if my words have resulted in such a backlash. I wont post my poems again.

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By *ogistical NightmaresCouple over a year ago

Manchester Area

Wonderful, I wish I could express my feelings and desires so well, thank you

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"I posted a poem before and recieved constructive and insightful comments that led to an interesting discussion, even if people didnt agree with the message as such... which was all fine! Unfortunately for some reason....it hasnt happened that way on here. So it has made me apprehensive about posting more in the future. So I apologise if my words have resulted in such a backlash. I wont post my poems again. "

I hope you will reconsider, as I enjoyed them both.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"I'm jealous of the man this is being written too and wish someone would write something like that for me. Don't be embarrassed.

I'm composing a sonnet for you right now, Andy

I will be sure not to CRITIQUE you, like you did me.... for having the courage to post it then...IF you do!

Ha, like I'm really going to compose a sonnet for Andy.

I actually think what you did was not bad at all. I'm was merely pointing out the "your lady" sentiment doesn't really fit if you're saying you intend to share your charms with others, that's all.

Calm down, calm down

I shall then do my best to acquiesce

I didnt ask for praise! I didn't ask for sarcasm either.

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By *iamondsmiles.Woman over a year ago

little house on the praire

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I loved your poem

u forgot the key line!

I have bacon

But you know I am your lady...

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

How rude..and how incorrect.

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By *r Mahogany70Man over a year ago

Leicester

"I'm jealous of the man this is being written too and wish someone would write something like that for me. Don't be embarrassed.

I'm composing a sonnet for you right now, Andy

I will be sure not to CRITIQUE you, like you did me.... for having the courage to post it then...IF you do!

Ha, like I'm really going to compose a sonnet for Andy.

I actually think what you did was not bad at all. I'm was merely pointing out the "your lady" sentiment doesn't really fit if you're saying you intend to share your charms with others, that's all.

Calm down, calm down

I shall then do my best to acquiesce

That's all well and good but where's my sonnet? LOL"

Aww, you're not going to hold me to that, are you?

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I would say tart with a heart ,

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

I may be sensitive...but I certainly did not deserve this. Really not necessary. I had no idea my post would result in this. I have NOT asked people to like it. I do NOT need praise and to be told I am wonderful. Thats not what it was about. I simply wrote a poem. ..which I did before and which people commented on.....about the theme of the topic. Some agreed and some didn't! That didnt matter. But they weren't rude and sarcastic.

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By *ogistical NightmaresCouple over a year ago

Manchester Area

After I (f) have been on fab for a number of years. You learn to take the rough with the smooth. Post whatever you wish. You will find sarcasm, calling and hatred. But ignore and continue what u enjoy.vi applaud you

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By *r Mahogany70Man over a year ago

Leicester

Calm down, calm down

I shall then do my best to acquiesce

I didnt ask for praise! I didn't ask for sarcasm either. "

You certainly have the temperament and fragile ego an artiste.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"I may be sensitive...but I certainly did not deserve this. Really not necessary. I had no idea my post would result in this. I have NOT asked people to like it. I do NOT need praise and to be told I am wonderful. Thats not what it was about. I simply wrote a poem. ..which I did before and which people commented on.....about the theme of the topic. Some agreed and some didn't! That didnt matter. But they weren't rude and sarcastic. "
If you can give it then you can receive it....

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"After I (f) have been on fab for a number of years. You learn to take the rough with the smooth. Post whatever you wish. You will find sarcasm, calling and hatred. But ignore and continue what u enjoy.vi applaud you "

Thankyou...and I am learning that there are plenty of people on FAB who just post to be confrontational and to cause unnecessary upset...hiding behind a screen. Writing and posting poetry online....is something that makes one vulnerable so I fully accept I am sensitive but I also foolishly hoped that people would understand that enough not to be sarcastic. That isnt discussion. Its just plain unpleasant.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

I have never been unpleasant to anyone unless they were deliberately unpleasant to me

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

Clearly! And very rudely too!

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By *am123Man over a year ago

essex chelmsford

i cant see anything here that should have offended you, its all just tongue in cheek.

you should be here on a bad nite the poem was good noone has said otherwise a few were just trying to have some banter thats all

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Lol....sorry...just had a moment! X"
I liked your moment and I am sure lost did too . As could see themselves in your words. When you post words here they are not yours no more but every ones ,As open forum to peoples _iews.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I enjoyed it. Kind of reminded me of one of my relationships. Poetry is thought provoking and stirs up emotions. There will always be a smart arse who can't be critical without trying to sound clever to impress his/her friends. Be yourself. Be unique . Be a free thinker or be absorbed by the group you once despised

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I would say do not under any circumstances give up your day job as composition and prose are just not your thing!

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Not just poetry - anything you post can be taken the wrong way, out of context, whatever. If something is that close to your heart, then do not post (about) it.

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By *bbandflowCouple over a year ago

South Devon

Not sure what you expected from the forum. Seems to me people haven't been rude just honest. Others have liked it. You must admit it was posted without preamble....if you like it and you enjoyed creating it then that's enough.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"Lol....sorry...just had a moment! XI liked your moment and I am sure lost did too . As could see themselves in your words. When you post words here they are not yours no more but every ones ,As open forum to peoples _iews."

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

But I am obviously naive to the way some people choose to behave.

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

"I would say do not under any circumstances give up your day job as composition and prose are just not your thing!"

Thankyou. Fortunately for you...I had no such plans.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"I would say do not under any circumstances give up your day job as composition and prose are just not your thing!"
I loved it and from the heart its lovely. x can you do better ? lets see.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I think ur poems great, ignore the critics, they know fuck all about brilliant talent and expression...anyway..on a entirely different subject...fancy a fuck?

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"I think ur poems great, ignore the critics, they know fuck all about brilliant talent and expression...anyway..on a entirely different subject...fancy a fuck?"

typical man

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

But I am obviously naive to the way some people choose to behave. "
I am sorry I gave an opinion? If you are going to compose a heartfelt piece of writing then in the words of my English literature teacher "you must do better" It was probably best sent by text?

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

But I am obviously naive to the way some people choose to behave. I am sorry I gave an opinion? If you are going to compose a heartfelt piece of writing then in the words of my English literature teacher "you must do better" It was probably best sent by text?"
LOOK speelings and words maybe your thing but feelings and her mind is all I care about .......

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

It doesnt matter now. I just wont post my poems again. Simple!

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

It's written well

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"It's written well

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its fine and we can read it .

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

did you ask your teacher how you could do better? Was that her standard marking scheme? Any real advice here?

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"I know its crap...and I am embarrassed especially when people take the piss. I am just beginning to use writing as a form of expressing in a different way. But never mind. I dont claim to be Shakespeare! "

It isn't crap. I wish I could write poems etc but can't. Your poem brought to mind a old song but damned if I can think of the proper name. keep posting you won't get bad comments from me

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

It isn't crap. I wish I could write poems etc but can't. Your poem brought to mind a old song but damned if I can think of the proper name. keep posting you won't get bad comments from me

always a woman to me?

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

did you ask your teacher how you could do better? Was that her standard marking scheme? Any real advice here? "
Don't post badly composed prose

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I think at times some just have to get on there high horse about spelling and things. But all that really matters is you liked your words in your post at the end of the day .

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

did you ask your teacher how you could do better? Was that her standard marking scheme? Any real advice here? Don't post badly composed prose "
and it was him!

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"It doesnt matter now. I just wont post my poems again. Simple!"

That will be a shame. Some people need to think about context before they post critical comments. Banter often steps over the line. I see it frequently. Writing like this comes from the heart and it is natural to feel vulnerable when you do it. Keep expressing yourself even if you don't post it. Share it with friends and lovers instead.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

did you ask your teacher how you could do better? Was that her standard marking scheme? Any real advice here? Don't post badly composed prose "

what makes it bad to you?

Him then

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

did you ask your teacher how you could do better? Was that her standard marking scheme? Any real advice here?

Don't post badly composed prose "

We look forward to your international publication with excited anticipation as clearly you are the expert! What a cheek I had...in posting my poor amateur attempts! I really should just crawl back into the deep dark depths of ill educated literary banality from whence I came!

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Look...I KNOW I am no poet...and some would argue why I am on a site like this. ...posting my 'poetry'...

It is simply another form of expressing feelings, thoughts, fantasy.... ideas.... which is what I believe the forums are about?

But I do not expect sarcasm.. especially from some who I would expect to know better! If you dont like it, then simply pass me by x"

I really liked it hun, don't be embarrassed be proud.

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

Art in any form, writing-painting-drawing-songwriting, etc etc is like wanking. Just so long as you personally get pleasure out of it, you're on to a winner.

If you dont want your work critiqued, a forum full of piss takers probably aint the best place to post...

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I just think we all see things different and the op should not give up ....... just get hard .. so they don't get to you and be true to yourself if not they win .

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

"Art in any form, writing-painting-drawing-songwriting, etc etc is like wanking. Just so long as you personally get pleasure out of it, you're on to a winner.

If you dont want your work critiqued, a forum full of piss takers probably aint the best place to post..."

doesn't matter what you put on here the not getting enough sex piss takers will have something to say about it. Yes I know I haven't used punctuation. I'm lazy

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By *iamondsmiles.Woman over a year ago

little house on the praire

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

did you ask your teacher how you could do better? Was that her standard marking scheme? Any real advice here?

Don't post badly composed prose

"
now whose being rude and sarcastic?

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

did you ask your teacher how you could do better? Was that her standard marking scheme? Any real advice here? Don't post badly composed prose

what makes it bad to you?

Him then "
Well, seeing as you asked! Firstly the subject matter implies erotica but is littered with banal expletives. The constant reference to being someones lady has no literal meaning. If it was heartfelt and I am sure it was then perhaps references to sexual piccadillos could have been better presented other than in as I say repetitive form and it didn't rhyme!!!!!!!!

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

did you ask your teacher how you could do better? Was that her standard marking scheme? Any real advice here? Don't post badly composed prose

what makes it bad to you?

Him then Well, seeing as you asked! Firstly the subject matter implies erotica but is littered with banal expletives. The constant reference to being someones lady has no literal meaning. If it was heartfelt and I am sure it was then perhaps references to sexual piccadillos could have been better presented other than in as I say repetitive form and it didn't rhyme!!!!!!!! "

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

did you ask your teacher how you could do better? Was that her standard marking scheme? Any real advice here?

Don't post badly composed prose

"
Typical woman! I never said you were ill educated I merely passed an opinion on a piece of work you presented. It was as I said earlier heart felt but .........not very good? Or should I have said awwww lovely you are the most incredible sensual woman a literary genius but a whore in bed?.........???

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By (user no longer on site) over a year ago

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

did you ask your teacher how you could do better? Was that her standard marking scheme? Any real advice here? Don't post badly composed prose

what makes it bad to you?

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By *bony in IvoryCouple over a year ago

Black&White Utopia

I liked it, and totaly got it!

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

did you ask your teacher how you could do better? Was that her standard marking scheme? Any real advice here?

Don't post badly composed prose

now whose being rude and sarcastic?"

Deserved I think? After what I have tolerated so far?

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By *ete and HerCouple over a year ago

Chester

Do I know or guess that composition and prose are your thing? x

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By (user no longer on site) OP over a year ago

I understand that completely. Of course they are entitled to their _iews.....but most arent giving their _iews on the poem but simply choosing to be unkind..

I don't believe that just because I post a poem. ..that it should give some people automatic license to be sarcastic and unpleasant.

did you ask your teacher how you could do better? Was that her standard marking scheme? Any real advice here?

Don't post badly composed prose

Typical woman! I never said you were ill educated I merely passed an opinion on a piece of work you presented. It was as I said earlier heart felt but .........not very good? Or should I have said awwww lovely you are the most incredible sensual woman a literary genius but a whore in bed?.........???"

As you wish.

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By *ezebelWoman over a year ago

North of The Wall - youll need your vest

I think we can leave it there

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