Quick first glance - there seemed a bit of repetition, as well as some over-long sentences: one had 44 words, without punctuation. There were occasional typos too, such as 'to', instead of 'too', 'there' not 'they're', 'ill' not 'I'll' that sort of thing and words without spaces, ie. 'eachothers'.
Those are fairly easy to correct, and can help if you'd like.
The repetition seemed around the exploring all areas of sex: this cropped up at the start, then a little way down, so was perhaps over done?
Let me know if you'd like any help. Good luck!! |
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Thanks for that I had no idea there was so many typo's although I do use my phone for this site generally it can get quite difficult not reverting to text speak lol any advice you can give would be welcome |
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