Ok so I have recently started writing short stories (erotic of course) Here are the first two paragraphs. Any feedback
Present from white
The doorbell rang. It was a parcel from Canada. Carefully rapped in crisp brown paper tied with a nylon string, White had sent her a present! She carefully untied the string. As she unfolded it the paper crackled. She knew he had lovingly wrapped it Inside was a note and something else wrapped in fine paper Her hands shaking as she opened the note. Something to keep you close to me Love White the note said.
• She could smell his favourote aftershave from the note Closing her eyes, inhaling she felt that White was indeed inside her body and mind. She remembered their first kiss that day at the waterfall. She could once again taste the kiss of his lips. Taking a moment to remember that day , His voice and his laugh so clear it was if he was there with her. Tired and without opening the parcel she fell asleep clutching that note. |
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• Next morning she awoke early with the radio still playing from the night before. Wondering if it was just a dream she opened her hands and there it was... The note from White. And on the corner of the Bed was the present still unopened. Relasing it wasn't a dream she knelt in front of the parcel. Wanting to tear it open but knowing how carefully he had wrapped it she gently unfolded the paper to once again reveal the smell of his aftershave. He must have sprayed some more inside, And there was White's present. The underwear that she knew she must wear that day! It was cream with a lacy red embroidered seems. After all red was her favourite colour! Carefully she examined her new underwear with its fine detailed lace border The material on the back of her panties so fine that she could clearly see her hand trough it. Wanting to get in to them as quickly as she could, she turned on the shower. It seemed forever before the water ran warm. As she stepped into the shower A song called, Girl from the North Country by Danny Bryant was playing on the radio She never heard it before but knew from that moment on that it was to be there song! With the water now running so warm, her skin glowed red. The loofa sponge soaked in shower cream she started wash. Carefully cleaning between each toe, she slowly worked her way up her legs, making sure to soak every part of her body in shower cream . Midway now she softly rubbed the loofah between her legs. Feeling with her left hand, she realised how aroused she was... Tempted to carry on, but she stopped! Not yet she thought! When all the suds were ringed away she steped out of the shower. Water droplets fell from her body on to the bathroom floor She wiped the mist from the mirror, revealng the reflection of her naked body. Wrapping herself in the warm towel she had just taken from the radiator she new today was going to be a good day. |
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